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Post by SpiderLondon on Fri Jul 12, 2013 11:12 am

Oh no, it's fine. I knew it was that paragraph. Mainly cause I added stuff in that one a bit late.
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Post by Truly_An_Cat on Fri Jul 12, 2013 5:43 pm

then... why didn't you edit it?

I don't know how to explain it exactly, but won't you get better readers, if your first chapters don't completely turn off literates?

For example, you used "to" instead of "too". If this (and awkward phrasing in some parts, where it could be avoided) is par for the story, why do I want to keep reading?

It seems like, Chapter 1 is the chapter where you don't want to turn your readers off.

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Post by Itchigotchi on Tue Jul 16, 2013 9:48 pm

http://sky-art-and-design.tumblr.com/post/54422777966

Hehheh This girl has it right.
'work' = Playing games, reading manga and watching videos, okay, I take my research very seriously!

EDIT:

'A Trolls Fairytale' was super cute and I enjoyed being a violent main character much more than being wishywashy ;D
Unicorns and Fairy boys ahaha~

'Katawa Shoujo' kicks me in the chest with strangeness and main characters depression. I've only gotten 'bad' endings so far.
They're really good at internal dialogue and musings without becoming boring. But I'm still glad they have a skip button.
I'm not completely sure how they do it, but I think I'll have to play more of the routes.
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Post by Itchigotchi on Thu Jul 18, 2013 8:48 pm

I laughed so much at 'Re: Prince of Nigeria'
It was short but it had so much stupidity and internet scam based silliness that I couldn't help but snort laugh a few times xD

'Ribbon of green' only has like, two choices in the whole game, and one of them has a fixed outcome anyway, but it has cute sad music.
Sortof like a little story about taking control of your future- like its meant to be sad but also inspirational.
Also, fully voice acted, which was surprisingly nice.
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Post by Itchigotchi on Sat Jul 20, 2013 11:02 pm

'The Legend of the Piper Girl' Took me forever to complete because I was just wandering around trying to find people to talk to or play the right song to find things.
It had an interesting moral deleimma about what is good and what is evil and who you should help, because everyone had legitimate reasons to hate each other.
Once again I feel affirmed that the best idea is not being able to walk around, because its simply frustrating and breaks the flow.

'(P)lanets' is about psychic powers and it pulls out just about every cliche in the book.
Badboys with dangerous powers, Being a genius clutz who hates school and gets superpowers, beautiful boys being especially interested in you for no apparent reason, the dorky best friend, the debilitating and terminal illness etc etc.
It could have been a cool idea, except the main character had almost no personality, nearly no emotions except some that seemed forced and fake and I didn't give a fuck who she ended up with.
I can't be bothered to play the other routes. Unless theres one where you can end up with the crossdresser. He was probably the best part of the entire game.

'Heartstring bugs' is over the course of three years of schooling, and every single day, you choose what to do.
It took too friggin long. Like, 8 hours too long.
You're a highschool girl obsessed with vampires, werewolves, getting a good grade, popstars, and all the cute boys in your class. An alien comes down and gives you life h@x which allows all these weird animations to come up around people, like sparkles and flames etc. and yet doesn't seem to make a tiny bit of difference in your life at all. It was interesting that you could date more than one person at once, and the cutscenes where they found out about each other and made you choose were mildly amusing, as well as their behaviour once they'd been broken up with.
Way too many choices and way too much time for a terribly mediocre story
T_T I WANT THOSE HOURS OF MY LIFE BACK
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